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Sahib al Qalam's avatar

This is my first time reading urdu on the substack. Tbh I had a stroke reading transliteration 😭😭. Thank you for the urdu script.

The poem is well articulated, is it worth my time? Yes absolutely.

Is there a room for improvement? Yes there is.

"Pata hai ki teri parwah na ki aur

yeh dil pathar ban gaya "

Since you are addressing the heart from the beginning, there's is no need to address it as a third person.

You can say ," Pata hai ki teri parwah na ki aur

Tu pathar ban gaya"

fariha.'s avatar

Such a beautiful poem, Allaahumma baarik, really liked reading it!

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